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i told you that night i would forget, but you
were too busy thinking
of when to see me
then

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overdosing on bedsheets and sunshine we were salty and guttural tides -
i had all but forgotten the smell behind your ear, the softness
of your throat when it growls in hunger
the comforting shape of your head under my clumsy hands, that
familiar taste on the tip of you, pulling us
apart and together again

III
but we overlooked the bitterness
of candy-coated chimeras
(ignored
the call of their acidic tongues)

IV
next year’s crop should be better, the almanac said;
we chose to believe it

V
go east; the trees whispered
the snow took away their breath leaving me here
with onions to peel and tears to wipe
noticing them you mentioned winter
would last longer

VI
i agreed




-Sophie, january-february 2014
Originally published in issue #25 of "Up the Staircase Quaterly"
www.upthestaircase.org/chouina…
August 6th 2014 : Very humbled to have received  a DD for this text. Thank you very much saevuswinds for suggesting it and to ShadowedAcolyte for featuring it.

hear me read it : soundcloud.com/wordeea/consens…
published  in issue #25 of Up The Staircase Quartely  www.upthestaircase.org/chouina…

28/9
:music: www.youtube.com/watch?v=C_C23J…
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Given 2014-08-06
consensus + AUDIO by Wordeea rides high on the strength of (in the words of the suggester) "masterfully written lines"; as an extra bonus, an audio version of the poet reading her work is linked in the comments ( Suggested by saevuswinds and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )

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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how I missed this when it was first posted, but this is just wonderful. The imagery really serves to perfectly paint the story you were telling here. Congratulations on the well-deserved DD! :heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you so much :heart:
this one means a lot so i am very glad it works well
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014
I was great to hear you recite the poem.  It gave it an extra texture that gets missed when you simply read the words to yourself off of a computer screen.  Well done!  :) (Smile) 
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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BigBlueSkyFotos Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Bravo! :rose: :heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you arthur :heart:
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Misgaeroten Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
Chouette
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oui :)
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Misgaeroten Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
:)
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Professional Writer
eheheh bravo ! bien méritée... :clap: :rose:
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