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i told you that night i would forget, but you
were too busy thinking
of when to see me
then

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overdosing on bedsheets and sunshine we were salty and guttural tides -
i had all but forgotten the smell behind your ear, the softness
of your throat when it growls in hunger
the comforting shape of your head under my clumsy hands, that
familiar taste on the tip of you, pulling us
apart and together again

III
but we overlooked the bitterness
of candy-coated chimeras
(ignored
the call of their acidic tongues)

IV
next year’s crop should be better, the almanac said;
we chose to believe it

V
go east; the trees whispered
the snow took away their breath leaving me here
with onions to peel and tears to wipe
noticing them you mentioned winter
would last longer

VI
i agreed




-Sophie, january-february 2014
Originally published in issue #25 of "Up the Staircase Quaterly"
www.upthestaircase.org/chouina…
August 6th 2014 : Very humbled to have received  a DD for this text. Thank you very much saevuswinds for suggesting it and to ShadowedAcolyte for featuring it.

hear me read it : soundcloud.com/wordeea/consens…
published  in issue #25 of Up The Staircase Quartely  www.upthestaircase.org/chouina…

28/9
:music: www.youtube.com/watch?v=C_C23J…
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Given 2014-08-06
consensus + AUDIO by Wordeea rides high on the strength of (in the words of the suggester) "masterfully written lines"; as an extra bonus, an audio version of the poet reading her work is linked in the comments ( Suggested by saevuswinds and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )

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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Je le relis et c'est toujours aussi bien quoi... :heart: et félicitations pour la DD !
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
merci !
oui, je l'aime beaucoup celuic-ci
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how I missed this when it was first posted, but this is just wonderful. The imagery really serves to perfectly paint the story you were telling here. Congratulations on the well-deserved DD! :heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you so much :heart:
this one means a lot so i am very glad it works well
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014
I was great to hear you recite the poem.  It gave it an extra texture that gets missed when you simply read the words to yourself off of a computer screen.  Well done!  :) (Smile) 
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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BigBlueSkyFotos Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Bravo! :rose: :heart:
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you arthur :heart:
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Misgaeroten Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
Chouette
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oui :)
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Misgaeroten Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
:)
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Professional Writer
eheheh bravo ! bien méritée... :clap: :rose:
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
merci :)
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Cinnamoncandy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your DD!
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much!
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Dragondud Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:#1:
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Dragondud Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on the DD! :happybounce:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
My pleasure :meow:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ! :la:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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meiyue Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Congratulations on the DD! :love: 

Have a nice day :iconlainloveplz:
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ! and you too :)
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:iconmeiyue:
meiyue Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Welcome :love:

Thankie :D
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! It's a truly deserving piece! :D 
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you !
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Phantomtigers Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD! I'll definitely be checking more of your stuff out later, your style is very interesting and unique :D
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ! yes please do and let me know what you think :)
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
I like this... not sure what it's about, or even if it's about anything, but it feels like I've walked in on a life in the raw... things happening and people doing and I've only caught a portion of it and understood even less, but when I walk away the life will continue regardless of whether I look or not, like it has for so long before I even got here.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a slice of life ... you are not far off at all :)
thank you for your comment, i really appreciate it :)
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SylveryFox Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
bah tu vois ... y'a des merdouilles et pis y'a des trucs bien aussi ;)

:clap::#1: :tighthug:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
la vie, quoi ;)
:quituesupergros:
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SylveryFox Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
valà :B
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
Ohhh congratulations, Sophie! :iconspinplz:
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much ! :hug:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much ! :heart:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014   General Artist
congratulations, dearest sophie! :squee: :love:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:squee: thank you !!
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silvernium Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:party: YAY!!!!

Congratulations !!!!!

:D
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D :iconifeelfluffy:
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krukof2 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Professional
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:iconcanadiaplz::winner::iconchampagneplz: BrAvoOOOoo pour La DD !!!! :party: :dalove:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:squee:
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Bravo. :D :clap:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
merci !
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